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I've seen this posted on so many of my flisters journals that I couldn't resist doing it. Besides, a little birdie wanted me to....
So here they are, my last 25 first lines:
*note: I didn't include my kink_bingo entries since there were 25 of them. So, it's the 25 other than those. Oh, and now that I've done this, I'm sneaking back up here to say that I also excluded co-written fics and the few drabbles I did a while back.
1)Wesley flung open the closet door and looked at the pitiful creature he had trapped inside. (Daddy's Little Bitch, Wesley/Connor, NC17)
2)Xander Harris Andrew continued to babble non-stop throughout the long drive to Los Angeles
3)Xander rolled over groggily and cuddled against the cool body next to him. (Daddy's Kitten Has Claws, Angel/Xander, NC17)
4)Angel finally heard the sound he’d been waiting to hear: fists hitting flesh. (Lure, Angel/Spike, NC17)
5)Xander wondered for the millionth time just what he’d done to piss off the happiness fairies. (Daddy's Got a Kitten Now, Angel/Xander, NC17)
6)It had started as one of their clever schemes to rid the world of some big evil. (Clever Schemes, Angelus/Fred/Willow, NC17)
7)As brilliant plans went, this one was not turning out to be one of Angel’s greatest. (Viper, Angel/Spike, NC17)
8)Xander really didn’t want to go toL.A.
9)Dean Winchester
10)Spike stared at the gathered Scoobies, chattering like magpies like nothing in the world was wrong. (Missing Series, Angel/Spike/Xander, NC17)
11)The moment Spike woke up, he knew he was in trouble. (Pop Quiz, Angel/Spike, NC17)
12)Angel and Spike were fighting when they stepped through the portal. (He's Got the Luck, HP Crossover with Angel/Spike, NC17)
13)If you had asked Angel several years ago if he would be waiting by the phone right now, he’d have laughed at you. If you told him who he’d be waiting for a call from, he would probably have staked you, assuming you were evil and delusional. (You've Got a Friend, Angel/Xander, PG13)
14)My name is Jonathan Levinson, and this is the true story of how I became a member of the harem of the most powerful vampire in the world. So sit back friends and be amazed by the story I am about to tell you. (Memoirs of a Harem Boy, Angelus/Harem, NC17)
15)There was something in his smell that drove Oz completely crazy. (Scent, Angel/Oz, NC17)
16)Angel could admit that he was freaked out. Well, he wouldn’t exactly use the term ‘freaked out’ but that’s the way Cordelia had described it and he thought the description apt. (Carpe Noctum Iterum, Angel/Spike, NC17)
17)It was easier than he’d anticipated to capture Angel. (One for the Road, Angel/Spike, NC17)
18)Xander paced outside the University Community Center, grumbling under his breath. (Cash, Check, or Charge, Oz/Graham, Xander/Riley, PG13)
19)Some people might call them Nightmares. Xander doesn’t. (Dark Fantasy, Xander/Caleb, NC17-flocked entry)
20)Willow was determined to make this work. (Soul Provider, Angel/Willow, R)
21)It was well agreed that Riley Finn was a stand up, All American kind of guy. (The Lies the Fairy Tales Told Us, Lindsey/Riley, NC17)
22)Angelus was sulking. (Alone At Last, Angelus/Fred, NC17)
23)It didn’t seem like it had been nearly a year since they’d first realized there was more than just an attraction, more than just a passing fling. (Blankets, Tea, and Me, Wesley/Oz, NC17)
24)Ianto tried not to be hurt every time he saw the looks that passed between Jack and Gwen. (More Than a Tea Boy, Spike/Ianto, NC17)
25)Night fell too quickly now for Angel. He treasured the light and the fact that it trapped him here at the hotel where he could hide away from the darkness and all the memories. (Corvinus Aurelius, Underworld Crossover, Mostly PG)
So, what have I learned from this about my first lines? Well, I almost always include the characters name right away. I tend to like a shorter, simpler sentence structure for opening lines. Beyond that....I got nothing. Feel free to analyze them if you want to and let me know what you see. I'm curious...
So here they are, my last 25 first lines:
*note: I didn't include my kink_bingo entries since there were 25 of them. So, it's the 25 other than those. Oh, and now that I've done this, I'm sneaking back up here to say that I also excluded co-written fics and the few drabbles I did a while back.
1)Wesley flung open the closet door and looked at the pitiful creature he had trapped inside. (Daddy's Little Bitch, Wesley/Connor, NC17)
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3)Xander rolled over groggily and cuddled against the cool body next to him. (Daddy's Kitten Has Claws, Angel/Xander, NC17)
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5)Xander wondered for the millionth time just what he’d done to piss off the happiness fairies. (Daddy's Got a Kitten Now, Angel/Xander, NC17)
6)It had started as one of their clever schemes to rid the world of some big evil. (Clever Schemes, Angelus/Fred/Willow, NC17)
7)As brilliant plans went, this one was not turning out to be one of Angel’s greatest. (Viper, Angel/Spike, NC17)
8)Xander really didn’t want to go to
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10)Spike stared at the gathered Scoobies, chattering like magpies like nothing in the world was wrong. (Missing Series, Angel/Spike/Xander, NC17)
11)The moment Spike woke up, he knew he was in trouble. (Pop Quiz, Angel/Spike, NC17)
12)Angel and Spike were fighting when they stepped through the portal. (He's Got the Luck, HP Crossover with Angel/Spike, NC17)
13)If you had asked Angel several years ago if he would be waiting by the phone right now, he’d have laughed at you. If you told him who he’d be waiting for a call from, he would probably have staked you, assuming you were evil and delusional. (You've Got a Friend, Angel/Xander, PG13)
14)My name is Jonathan Levinson, and this is the true story of how I became a member of the harem of the most powerful vampire in the world. So sit back friends and be amazed by the story I am about to tell you. (Memoirs of a Harem Boy, Angelus/Harem, NC17)
15)There was something in his smell that drove Oz completely crazy. (Scent, Angel/Oz, NC17)
16)Angel could admit that he was freaked out. Well, he wouldn’t exactly use the term ‘freaked out’ but that’s the way Cordelia had described it and he thought the description apt. (Carpe Noctum Iterum, Angel/Spike, NC17)
17)It was easier than he’d anticipated to capture Angel. (One for the Road, Angel/Spike, NC17)
18)Xander paced outside the University Community Center, grumbling under his breath. (Cash, Check, or Charge, Oz/Graham, Xander/Riley, PG13)
19)Some people might call them Nightmares. Xander doesn’t. (Dark Fantasy, Xander/Caleb, NC17-flocked entry)
20)Willow was determined to make this work. (Soul Provider, Angel/Willow, R)
21)It was well agreed that Riley Finn was a stand up, All American kind of guy. (The Lies the Fairy Tales Told Us, Lindsey/Riley, NC17)
22)Angelus was sulking. (Alone At Last, Angelus/Fred, NC17)
23)It didn’t seem like it had been nearly a year since they’d first realized there was more than just an attraction, more than just a passing fling. (Blankets, Tea, and Me, Wesley/Oz, NC17)
24)Ianto tried not to be hurt every time he saw the looks that passed between Jack and Gwen. (More Than a Tea Boy, Spike/Ianto, NC17)
25)Night fell too quickly now for Angel. He treasured the light and the fact that it trapped him here at the hotel where he could hide away from the darkness and all the memories. (Corvinus Aurelius, Underworld Crossover, Mostly PG)
So, what have I learned from this about my first lines? Well, I almost always include the characters name right away. I tend to like a shorter, simpler sentence structure for opening lines. Beyond that....I got nothing. Feel free to analyze them if you want to and let me know what you see. I'm curious...
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Gabrielle
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I agree that you definitely like to give the character's name right away. What I also see is that you give a really nice teaser to the *what* of your story.
Almost without exception, each of your opening lines has a teaser making you want to read more.
1. What is the pitiful creature?
2. Why are they driving to Los Angeles?
7. What was Angel's plan?
11. Why is Spike in trouble?
See, you get my meaning? You are getting me/us involved right away asking questions that make us want to keep reading.
You write so much and are so good at it, you probably knew you were doing this all along. I, on the other hand, have never taken a writing class and have only dabbled in writing and have zero technique. I only have the fact that I read a lot as an example of how to put stuff on paper. No technique, no training.
After reading your opening lines, I think I might go back and see how the heck I start any fic or chapter of a fic. I like what you have done. It is very effective.
I hope you don't mind the long observation, but it seemed that was what you were asking for.
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MWAH *snuggles*
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